Saving the Fiddleman by mattwatt

Author's Description:
Cora Sturgis was a musician. She played violin and was ever grateful for the influence, and the kindness shown her by the great violinist Simon Neale. He'd even been her teacher for a while. Imagine her surprise then, when she discovered, through her friend Beth, that the bum at the James St off ramp was indeed Simon Neale. Cora was determined to do something but the ensuing romance had never been in her plans.
Size: 47 KB (9,100 words)
Genre: Romantic
Sex Contents: Some Sex
Tags: Ma/Fa, Romantic, Masturbation, Petting

Review by Steve Ogden   [other reviews by Steve Ogden]

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I really want to like this story, it has all the elements there for a great romantic story but it's just too short.

The plot is fine, there are characters to fill out the plot but it's just too rushed. What is a single page story could easily be a serial that would have readers waiting for the next installment. I would love to see that happen. There is so much material here that could be developed and it's just a shame it was over so quickly.

So the plot gets a high mark, technical quality is OK, no obvious typos etc but the style lets it down, appeal to reviewer was hard as the story is fine but it could have been so much more.