1: Wrong Number by Phoenix Arrow This story is very bold. It's written as pure dialogue with no discription until the very end. Any writer should read this story just to experence the style. My hat is off the Phoenix Arrow for such a bold move.
Phoenix Arrow paces the story so that you're constantly wanting more. The way a reader is moved forward by inches allows for suspension of disbelief.
2: Coming Home to Mom by JetBoy This story is told very well. While the plot moves pretty quickly JetBoy plants the seeds early in the story that this has been building for sometime.
The fact that the ending is left vague is also a plus the reader can interpret the future however they'd like to imagine it.