I had a reader decide to send me a nasty gram about NIS Breeders that it had taken 19 chapters to tell the first three days of the story.
He said "Other than that, it's a good story".
Wow, talk about demotivational.
Imagine if I just skimped and summarized the days into a few paragraphs. He'd complain about that.
I spent a LOT of time really painting the world in which the characters live. I have been working on SHOWING instead of TELLING the reader things.
I've been enjoying being more descriptive about body language instead of only telling you what the character's emotions are. I've joyously described the character's relationships, the background, etc. to establish the foundation of what is one of the longest stories I've ever written.
For example, when Karen is very serious, I want the reader to get that from her body language and how she signs up for extra credit without hesitation. How she reacts to getting a reward of chewing gum for good behavior. Etc.
The first three days were crucial to build that up. One little easter egg you will note in this story:
In a lot of stories, the butterflies in the tummy appear whenever they get humiliated.
I increase these butterflies activity to the point they get on little Harley Davidson's and ride like hellions through her stomach burning and pillaging.
At some point, those butterflies grow quiet though as she starts to accept the reality of her new life and when they wake up it's Butterfly Armegeddon. That's an example of how I was trying to be more descriptive rather than just say "I was nervous" or "I was REALLY apprehensive and nervous" about something. I do that too, but I try to use more descriptors as I polish up the chapters to post.
I also create art for this story, more in the start to establish the characters. As the story progresses, there won't be as many pictures.
It's important to me that the reader understand the rules of the Program. I published the entire set of rules. I summarize those rules later, and spent time in the orientation showing the reader how those rules are put into practice.
Later in the story, I do skip ahead a few weeks, and then a few months and such. I didn't feel the need to be descriptive about the actual birthing process because it's frankly very clinical and while there can be tension, I didn't write the actual delivery. I worked on the scene, but it felt very unfun to me to write, so I assumed it would be unfun to read.
However, I wrote the events leading up to it and after.
There are 75 chapters. I am not even 25% of the way complete. I obviously will spread out the events after the foundation is complete to tell the entire story.
I will just say two things to the trolls.
1. I do this for free. You get what you pay for. Please don't troll me with comments and emails denigrating the story. It's an instant block. I am not here to debate, or argue. If you cant be constructive, put your email in the garbage.
2. Don't do that to any authors here. You aren't making things better. You are making things worse.
If you can't write a story yourself, your contributions of "your story sucks" only add to a general level of toxicity that still plagues this site. You get what you pay for and if all you do is pay in toxic behavior, then expect same in return.